Education is one of the most important investment in society. Some peoples argue that students should must pay full tuition for their university, while others believe that university must to be free for everyone. In my view, I think a balanced model would be the best. ⚠ 5 lỗiđoạn 1 · GRA + LR ✕ Plural · "peoples" → "people" ✕ Plural · "investment" → "investments" ✕ Modal stack · "must to be" → "should be" ⚠ Redundant · "In my view, I think" ⚠ Modality · "should must" → "should" Đoạn intro có 5 lỗi grammar cốt lõi. "peoples" là lỗi cấp B1 — em đã ở B2, không nên mắc. "must to be" là cách dịch word-by-word từ tiếng Việt "phải là". ▼ Em viếtEducation is one of the most important investment in society. Some peoples argue... university must to be free... ⇢ ▲ AI gợi ýEducation is one of the most important investments in society. Some people argue... university should be free...

On one hand, there is many advantages when students pay their own tuition. Firstly, it can make a pressure on students to study harder. Secondly, it helps the government to save a lot of money for other public services like hospital and roads. However, this model also have downsides — many smart kids from poor families cannot afford it. ⚠ 5 lỗiđoạn 2 · GRA + LR + register ✕ SV-agreement · "there is many" ✕ SV-agreement · "model also have" ✕ Collocation · "make a pressure" → "put pressure on" ⚠ Register · "kids" → "students/young people" ⚠ Informal · "a lot of" → "many/significant" Collocation "make a pressure" là direct translation từ "tạo áp lực" — IELTS Writing yêu cầu collocation đúng (put/exert/place pressure). "kids" rất informal — band 7+ phải dùng "students" hoặc "young people".

On the other hand, making university free has many benefits. Most importantly, it give equal opportunity to all students regardless their background. It also helps the country to have a more high-skilled workforce. However this model is very expensive, and tax payer must pay a lot. ✕ 4 lỗi GRAđoạn 3 · GRA chiếm 60% ✕ SV · "it give" → "it gives" ✕ Preposition · "regardless their" → "regardless of their" ✕ Comparative · "more high-skilled" → "more highly skilled" ⚠ Linker · "However" thiếu dấu phẩy 3/4 lỗi đoạn này là GRA. Em đang yếu nhất tiêu chí này (5.5 trên transcript) — cần focus rèn subject-verb agreement + preposition collocation.

In conclusion, I personally think that the best model is a hybrid one. Government should subsidize tuition for students from low-income families, while charging full or partial fee to students who can afford it. This way, education become both fair and sustainable. ★ Conclusion strongđoạn 4 · TR + CC tốt ✓ Clear opinion (hybrid) ✓ Practical recommendation ⚠ "education become" → "education becomes" Em có quan điểm rõ ràng (hybrid model) — đây là điểm mạnh TR. Examiner sẽ thấy em có position thật, không sit-on-fence. Chỉ thiếu 1 SV agreement cuối.

Education is one of the most important investment in society. Some peoples argue that students should must pay full tuition...

On one hand, there is many advantages when students pay tuition... it can make a pressure...

On the other hand, it give equal opportunity to all students regardless their background... a more high-skilled workforce...

In conclusion, the best model is a hybrid one. Government should subsidize tuition for low-income families...